User:American Lautaro/Representative democracy/Michael.gary16 Peer Review

Your goal with a peer review is to identify specific ways the article could be improved, and note any major problems that ought to be fixed. Consider these questions:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?

Hi Nelson! I know this page says "Representative Democracy", but this peer review is for your self-started "Representative Government" article. Writing an entire article from scratch is highly ambitious and very impressive. Overall, I think this is an excellent working draft. In particular, you have an evident grasp on Manin and Dahl's conceptions of representative governments. You explain these well and the reader comes away with a solid, concise understanding of these theories. Moreover, you have many citations and links to other Wikipedia articles which brings the piece credibility. In terms of adjustments moving forward, I have a couple of suggestions. Firstly, I think the "History" section should be expanded. This is a very tricky topic because the history of representative government in itself is a library-worth of information. Obviously, you don't want to spend your whole life on this piece, but expanding the history section feels like a necessary edit. Secondly, at times the piece sounds a touch informal in the way you use "We" or "It is clear". In your revision, I'd look for places where you sound conversational. Just as an example, instead of "It is clear Manin views..." make that "Manin views". Again, your work is stellar and I look forward to reading the final product!

Best, Michael