User:American Lautaro/Representative democracy/Rkm22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm looking at Nelson's article about Representative democracy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:American Lautaro/Representative democracy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Nelson!

This draft is looking good so far. Looking at the main page, I think your edits will add a necessary philosophical perspective to the content already written in the article. They're neutral, well-written, and clear.

In regards to the "In Theory" section, you might want to add a quick lead, something along the lines of "Political theorists have disputing definitions of representative democracy and whether this form of government even counts as democracy itself." On that subject, I'm wondering how you plan to distinguish Dahl's claims that these governments are not democracies are at all (given that the article title is 'Representative democracy',). Perhaps clarifying the introductory sentence to be as such: "Dahl disagrees that the governments that we call representative democracies can be classified as democracy at all. He re-labels these as "polyarchies" to highlight that ....."

I see that you are planning to write about the Role of the Representative. While I don't want to deviate your focus from that, I saw that another potential area of the article that could use some expansion was the "Representation per se" part. It seems like Manin honestly has a lot of useful contributions towards whether representatives could be truly representative given the biases of elections. You might want to think about adding those.

I think you might also benefit from adding an image – which one did you plan to put in at the bottom?

Hope this helps,

Rabhya