User:Aminah2640/Feminist health center/Avrillarios Peer Review

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Aminah2640
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 * User:Aminah2640/Feminist health center
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 * Feminist health center:

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Hi Aminah!

I really enjoyed reading your additions to the Feminist health center article. While I also focused on health care, my research was more geared towards volunteering in healthcare so it was great to read about something interconnected, but also a completely different emphasis. I really admire the way you were able smoothly integrate your research into the article's body paragraphs. It was also great to see the several examples your provided in the text regarding current centers for women.

Right of the bat, I will say that it was a bit overwhelming to read through the entire text in one go as it is such a large section. It may be useful to find a place or two where you can break it up to start a new paragraph. This would ensure better readability for the reader.

The tone you use is generally neutral in terms of presenting factual information and describing the services provided by these centers while still clearly advocating for the topic a hand. All of the information you provided was very relevant and comprehensive.

While you did a great job citing most of the information provided, I do think that it would be appropriate to update your citations to be in the Wikipedia format rather than an essay format. You can do this by imbedding a citation with the quotation symbol at the top of the page. This will start a references list at the bottom of the page for you so that the reader can easily access your sources. There may also be a few additional spots that citations are necessary such as when talking about Sister to Sister or the Women's Cancer Research Center just to be open with where you are getting this information from.

Overall, you did a great job with your contributions to this article!