User:Aminah2640/Race and health in the United States/Avrillarios Peer Review

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Aminah2640
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 * User:Aminah2640/Race and health in the United States
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 * Race and health in the United States

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Hi Aminah!

Just like I explained in my peer review for your other article, I really enjoyed learning more about a different emphasis of health care. You provided a very comprehensive overview of the politicization of women's reproductive rights in the United States, covering historical context, recent legal developments, and the impact of federal policies on healthcare access. Despite the length of the article, you were able to find such an underdeveloped section and add a great amount of relevant information. I really think this will really improve the current imbalance that the article's "Reproductive health" section is facing.

I think that you cited your information very well, but would recommend that you incorporate the formate of Wikipedia citations rather than the typical essay format. This can be done by using the quotations icon at the top of the screen.

I feel that your text was neutral given that the entire article is advocating for better health for minorities in the United States. For the sake of Wikipedia neutrality, however, I wonder if it would be useful to incorporating perspectives from stakeholders with differing opinions, such as policymakers, healthcare providers, or advocacy groups, to provide a more well-rounded discussion. While you did a great job advocating from the patient's perspective, I wonder if there are other necessary viewpoints to include.

Overall, I really enjoyed the facts that you provided in your additions to the article. They are very unfortunate and shocking which is typically what causes people to take action. Great job!