User:Amirjeudy/Turbi massacre/Dmt2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amirjeudy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Amirjeudy/Turbi massacre


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Turbi massacre

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

1. The lead has been updated. It gives a very brief overview of the article topic. The opening sentence is good. It does not give a summary of the article's main sections. The lead should be expanded to include more details.

2. The content added is relevant to the topic. The content is up to date as this event occurred in 2002. There is a lot of content missing. The Gabra Retaliation and Government response sections are missing. The sections that have been updated could use more elaboration. There should be an impacts section. The article does deal with an equity gap.

3. The article is neutral. It is not biased. It just presents facts as cited in sources.

4. There is a lack of scholarly journals used in this article. The content reflects what the cited sources say. The references section needs to be fixed (you have references 1-6 and then another 1-3, there should be references 1-9). You need at least 10 sources and 5 peer reviewed sources. A lot of the sources are from nation. You should find other sources as well. The links work. There is no link for:


 * 1) "Kenya arrests seven after village." July 18, 2005.

5. The article needs to be expanded. It seems organized so far. It is easy to read, but too concise.

6. There are no images.

7. The article is not more complete. The article adds more about inter-clan tensions, which is good. There should be more detail about the massacre and the impacts. The Gabra Retaliation and Government response sections are missing. Also, explain the differences between the Gabra and Borana clans.