User:Amrae43/Onchocerciasis/Beelerq Peer Review

notes: first notices

- need citations in "causes"

-elaborate more on sub-Saharan status; epidemiology.

-lead paragraph to context, add connection e.g. (river blindness --> onchocerciasis)

prevention section:
- good relevant information that covers various control programs and initiatives aimed at prevention. You could follow this by providing what methods were used by the programs (ones that were most effective) showing the program's contribution to the prevention.

- provide the methods used by the countries that eradicated the disease.

epidemiology section:
geographic distribution, I think adding more details on the affected areas could help. Something like adding how the specific regions or communities within Nigeria, Cameroon, Ethiopia, Uganda, and the Congo are impacted. ￼

Finding some articles that provide important quantitative data on the incidence, prevalence, or demographics (like what age/gender are impacted the most)

Regarding the passage about CDTI efforts. Good start, maybe the article used didn't elaborate enough about the methods used to reduce microfilariae loads. This could just be a quick important summary on the implementation and scale of the program.

Other suggestions that might help add important information:

-what are the trends, impacted between onchocerciasis on the blindness/epilepsy. Data about the CDTI efforts decreasing blindness. Prevalence patterns?

-finally I'm sure you know, but need more citations at the end of sentences.

Causes section:
-good coverage on the etiology and risk factor of the disease.

some things to consider adding:

- add environmental factors, I think this was indirectly mentioned through the description of transmission but adding a direct correlation to the environment will help add important information.

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