User:Amrae43/Onchocerciasis/Phwikiproj Peer Review

General info
Amrae43
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Amrae43/Onchocerciasis&action=edit&section=8
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Onchocerciasis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Could use some more data or numbers in the epidemiology section to show the scale of the changes being talked about.

The epidemiology section could use additional citations or information from additional sources.

Some citations need to be embedded still in the prevention section.

There is some repeated info in "signs and symptoms" that was already stated in the opening paragraph about losing vision due to infection. This is a good fact, but it might not be necessary to be in both sections.

Do not need comma after "skin" in last sentence of the first paragraph in "signs and symptoms" section

The information about the orgin of the common phrase "river blindness" was a good addistion and I think it fits really well with the section that it opens.