User:Amt1997/Environmental impact of mining/Kawther.H Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amt1997


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Amt1997/Environmental impact of mining


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental impact of mining

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello,

Greet work on the references and sources, they all seem to be reliable, up-to-date, and overall good. Also, speaking about different types of mining and their environmental impacts presents a wide range of perspectives which gives the reader an engaging article. Consider the comments below as things to incorporate into your future edits to make the article stronger as a whole.

Content:

The information provided is very brief and general. All the sections in the draft need to be further developed to include more details and explain aspects that are mentioned very vaguely.

Presentation: The language used is heavily technical and it seems to assume a knowledgeable audience. Since Wikipedia articles are open for everyone to view, it will be beneficial either change the wording, or explain the specific aspects/ terms so that the article is clearer for the general public.

Tone:

The draft is generally neutral, however it only focuses on the negative impacts of mining. Although it could be implicit from the article's title that it will focus on the negative impacts of mining, the word "impact" does not generally only infer negative impacts. Therefore, adding a brief section about the positive environmental impacts of mining will balance out the information and cover the topic from multiple perspectives which eliminates bias.

Technicalities:

It is understandable that this is your first edit and that more work will be added in the upcoming weeks.

- The term "ecosystem" is often used in the draft without specifying which ecosystem is in reference. It will help to include the types of ecosystems that are being considered.

- The draft has a few minor grammatical errors and it can use some proof reading.

- The titles of the sections are different than each other and need to be organized. This is since the first two titles refer to the material that is being mined while the second two section refer to the process of which mining is happening. Furthermore, the first section is a direct impact of mining. Organizing the titles to general sections and subsections will be beneficial in creating a better flow in the article and give a more organized presentation.

Overall:

Good work and good luck.

K.H