User:Amyaris/Effects of pornography/Ezacarias01 Peer Review

REVIEWED BY USING STRIKETHROUGH TEXT AND BOLDED UNDERLINED TEXT
Hi Aleksander,

Below you should see the suggested changes I made to your draft article. I used the strikethrough feature to delete some text and used a bolded font to add suggested text.

Most of the changes made were due to grammatical errors and/or sentence structure.

So far, you seem to have a good start.

Just make sure not to make your writing to be research oriented. Try using less quoted citations from your sources and put them into your own words.

Article Draft
This is the sandbox for the article "Effects of Pornography".

Tolerance (portion will be used in "Sexual Preferences" sub-heading)
Source 1 and 2

Withdrawal Symptoms (new sub-heading in "Psychological Effects" or add on below same heading)
Sources 1, 2, 3, 7.

Sexual Deviations (further add on to "Sexual Preferences" sub-heading)
A cross-sectional study on prevalence and patterns in pornography use has detected individuals who did mention an increasing mentioned an increased need for more extreme content. Although this may have been depicted as a result of desensitization due to frequent use of pornography thus a need to use more graphic, violent, and degrading porn material to achieve similar sexual arousal, the actual causation comes from aggression as "more extreme pornography material was more frequently reported by males describing themselves as aggressive." On the other hand, females who did mention increasing who increased their search for more extreme pornographic content came form from the curiosity aspect itself rather than a need due to desensitization.

The research Research focused on associations of dark personality traits with online activities has also found some dark traits related to online sexual use. Specific online activities of the study covered social media, online gaming, online gambling, online shopping and online sex. The last one was online sex. The results showed that "Machiavellianism, spitefulness, sadism, and narcissism were related to different types of internet activities such as online sex, social media use, online gambling, online gaming, and online shopping." Individuals' correlation to sexual use to such study variables is Machiavellianism (.32), spitefulness (.31), sadism (.34), narcissism (.24), and psychopathy (.26).

Preference to pornography than sexual excitement (add on "Sexual Satisfaction" sub-heading)
Individual Individuals who use pornography alongside masturbation as the primary tool of sexual arousal and fulfillment of one's sexual satisfaction (or needs) may become conditioned to prefer pornography more than other needs of sexual arousal. Furthermore, the "frequency of pornography consumption was also directly related to a relative preference for pornographic rather than partnered sexual excitement." The individuals in the given study primarily used pornography for masturbation purposes. Such preference of pornography over sexual satisfaction fulfilled with a partner, especially in the case of extracting sexual information from pornography, would lead to lower overall sexual satisfaction. Individuals who seek pornography as the main source of information about sexuality were associated with lower sexual excitement, and in return, lower sexual satisfaction in a partnered relationship. Gender did not affect the results of such findings.

However, pornography among some individuals is not only used for sexual satisfaction. A study on affection substitution has shown that "pornography consumption is positively related to affection deprivation, depression, and loneliness and inversely related to experienced affection, relational satisfaction, and closeness." All presented above variants, except affection deprivation, had a significant correlation based on statistical data. Due to such positive relations, individuals who consume pornography not only use it to satisfy their sexual arousal, but also to reduce loneliness and create a coping mechanism against social disconnection. Some of the examples of coping mechanisms may include "creating parasocial relationships with the characters depicted in pornography."

Female negative body image (add on to Body image-female sub-heading)
A study done in 2021 has shown a mediating role of pornography use among women and how it affects the consciousness of body image and attachment insecurities. Girls who have not experienced a sensitive response to their needs and/or were emotionally deprived under the parent/caretaker childhood environment had a greater chance of developing insecurities about their body image. The use of pornography seems to amplify attachment fears and anxiety. Such anxiety is correlated to females seeking approval of their bodies and self-worth from their counterpart in a relationship setting. The finding findings did correlate with past research articles which found that "anxious but not avoidant attachment affects body image, the drive for thinness, body dissatisfaction and body appreciation." Furthermore, pornography use could also amplify women's body image self-consciousness in an intimate setting. The acts performed in pornographic movies created a feeling of pressure among women, not only creating a higher negative body image but also the feeling of being criticized by their partners if their body was not resembling the body shape of models in pornographic content. However, mediating role between pornography, and anxiety attachment, and body image self-consciousness was found only in women in a relationship at the time of the study, which correlated with attachment theory.