User:Anabellakb/L.A. Burdick/Zhifanfu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Anabellakb


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * L.A. Burdick


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * L.A. Burdick

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

There is a sentence introduce how many stores this brand has in the US and gives a general impression of how the store positions itself. The lead sentences introduces the locations of the store but didn't elaborate more in the actual content. I think it is reasonable because the location details are more important in maps and Wikipedia functions as a knowledge base.

Content

The store design section is also informative and interesting to read. I noticed that you introduced the head of the store's career background, which is also helpful for someone who is interesting to learn more about the store.

Tone and Balance

The tone is neutral and the use of the language is unbiased. The content added are very informative.

Sources and References

I like the popular sources being included here and they are all form local/ national newspaper. However, I think the scholarly sources are not enough to prove the credibility of this article. I think it might be hard to find credible sources since this is just a store focused on chocolate beverages.

Organization

The organization is well-structured and easy to read. I love how you started the page with the history of the brand and that gives a comprehensive overview for this page.

Images and Media

I love how you include a store image with a menu included! This gives the reader a sense of what does the store look like and what kind of drink they offer. It would be more interesting to see some images of the products.

Overall impressions

As one of the most beloved chocolatier store in Boston, I think it is necessary to include a Wikipedia page for this store/brand. However, I think more reliable sources need to be added to the page to make sure all the information are trustworthy for the readers.