User:Anacintron13/Applied science/Melanierobertson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Anacintron13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Applied science
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Applied science

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead seems to be updated by the new content added by my peer in her draft. It includes an introductory sentence that clearly describe's her aim and article. It leads into a brief, but not too broad, description of the article's major sections. The lead is overall concise and includes the appropriate amount of information needed following the article. The content added is relevant and helpful to the topic and seems to be fairly up to date. The references seem to be absent in this draft as well as citations. I would maybe add more background on the book itself, before publishing, to help readers gain a better picture. The neutral content doesn't seem to claim any heavily bias towards a particular position. It is simply expanding the audiences knowledge towards Applied Science itself. There seemed to be no current repetition of material and no attempt of persuasion. I'm not sure if the new content is backed by reliable sources because they seem to be absent as of now in this draft, but the chosen book seems to be scholarly. Reviewing the book chosen, the information seems related and relevant. The content seems to be well written but can also improve by adding more details and heading titles to the page itself to help shape the organization better. There are few grammar errors, I don't think that is a concern. There are no images in the drafted article, but I don't think that is necessary as there are images on the main article page itself. Maybe add a picture of the author and the book. By adding this content to the existing article it will improve the overall quality, as long as sources are correctly cited. I think this is a great expansion on Applied Science and gives readers another point of view to help better understand the overall topic, as it can be confused with just basic science!