User:Analiyah315/Public security/Lilrayrobb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Analiyah315


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Analiyah315/Public_security?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Public security

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Would add a little more detail to lead. For the lead try talking about more major aspects of the body but keep it concise. Would also add hyperlinks to certain so if people don't know what certain things are they can click it and have more knowledge on that topic. The amount of information you have in your body is really good and it all has the same flow without being biased. There is also no persuasion which is good so I think the only addition would be the lead and some links!