User:Anamhye/Q fever/Amrae43 Peer Review

General info
Anamhye
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Anamhye/Q fever - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Q fever - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
- in the paragraph that starts "studies indicate a higher prevalence... " you mention occupational exposures well. You go on to say that contributing risk factors are __, __, and occupational exposures. I think this information does not need to be repeated here, as you spent time already listing these occupational exposures.

- in the paragraph that starts "in regards to age and occupational..." you might want to reorganize a bit. I do think it is all beneficial information to include, but you talk a bit about symptoms and transmission where you started focusing on risk factors. I think there could be a better place to put the following information --> "The disease can manifest years after the initial infection, presenting symptoms like non-specific fatigue, fever, weight loss, and endocarditis. Transmission is primarily through inhalation. Children are less likely to contract the disease, but if they do, particularly those who live in rural areas with livestock, they can experience similar symptoms as adults." <-- as this is not exactly talking about risk.

- Can you elaborate on epidemiology in Latin America? What patterns have been traced? What is a "one-health" approach? Maybe define this or re-word the sentence. I am not familiar with this term, and I'm sure there could be others as well that just need a little more information about what this is.

- Remember you can use hyperlinks to other wikipedia pages to help you define more difficult topics instead of explaining them all in your edits. For example, serologic methods, unpasteurized. These are terms that a common citizen might be confused about if they do not have a health/medical background, and by hyperlinking, they might be able to dig into the topic of interest a bit more.

- Like I said, I think this is all good information to include, all of the info makes it so a reader can get a better understanding about distribution and transmission of Q fever. It is clear and free of spelling/grammar errors that I noticed. I would just focus on making it concise and following a pattern for displaying it.

Good Work!