User:Anamhye/Q fever/JHannaUWEC Peer Review

General info
Anamhye
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Anamhye/Q fever - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Q-Fever - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
-I feel there is a better introduction that you could include in your draft. Starting with where the disease isn't found seems too niche compared to the whole picture. You would probably be better off introducing the topic  with how it can spread, similar to your second paragraph.

-There also seems to be a lot of pairs of sources, which I’m assuming means that multiple sources agree with each other. This is a very nice bonus and shows great dedication for the craft and quality of the draft.

-There is definitely a better way to organize all this text, adding more sub headers to be able to portray the information better which would be incredibly useful and much appreciated.

-In the paragraph that starts with “studies indicate a higher prevalence of Q fever in men than in women…” the ending sentences don’t seem to have any sources/references attached to them. Ideally they have articles backed behind them, and they most likely do, so that's an easy fix. :)

Great draft!