User:Ananya.srivatsan/Health effects of pesticides/Kcore142 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Ananya.srivatsan)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ananya.srivatsan/Health_effects_of_pesticides?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * None
 * None

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think your article draft is pretty good. I think you use good sources and provided a good case study of Autism. I also liked how you acknowledged that more research needs to be done and the studies can't make a firm conclusion with only 465 participants. However, you still need to add your other example and I would suggest be less descending towards groups affected and instead title it, "Effects On Communities" and state that low income families have been the most affected with the same basic idea and be specific when you mean "the type of community it was."