User:Ananya.srivatsan/Health effects of pesticides/MrMacchiatoo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Ananya.srivatsan, Mxd8371)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ananya.srivatsan/Health_effects_of_pesticides?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

General review
After reading through the article I noticed that some of the writing was not neutral especially in the introduction. Also as the article becomes more refined, maybe you can include images to back up the information you have gathered and to make it more clear. I am however impressed with the level of organization in the article and thought that the way you formatted it made it clear and easier to read.

Tone (More Neutral Writing)

 * Introduction's writing is not neutral "humans are losing sight of the negative impacts that these pesticides are having on the health of people."

Content

 * The diseases themselves are important but discuss more about how the pesticides cause the diseases