User:Ander0056/Ezell Blair Jr./LBaugustana Peer Review

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Could add more information Khazan's personal life. For example give the names of the three children and talk about any importance his family had on his life.

Grammer : Using passive voice instead of active voice. This can be fixed by rewriting the sentence with the subject doing the action.

More information can be discussed for the paragraph about his later life.

The content looks strong and is well structured grammer is good besides you could try using stronger synonyms.

Early life and education was the longest and most informing details maybe focus now more on other topics are add a new topic that has relevance.

Could go more in depth of how the protest and events were such major events for the civil rights movement.