User:Anderabx/Bioluminescence/Cece44444 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Anderabx


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Anderabx/Bioluminescence


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bioluminescence

Lead
N/A - Not Edited

Content
The content added to the Illumination section is both relevant and concise. The sources added are a little old but this is still a reasonable time span for deep sea research.

For the M. niger part, information about the organism's prey and the insensitivity of its eyes to the indicated pigment may help improve clarity and understanding.

Tone and Balance
The tone of your updates is professional and scientific, and does not contain any biases or persuasive elements. All added content is neutral. The flow of you edits is very nice, it reads well.

Sources and References
The added sources are functional (all links work). The new sources are relevant and thorough, and you summarized them succinctly without repeating the wording of the actual source. All added content is backed up with a solid list of peer-reviewed sources.

The content about M. niger needs to have the proper in-text citations.

Organization
One sentence was very confusing to me: "This adaptation allows the fish to see red-pigmented prey, which are normally absent from the deep ocean environment where red light has been filtered out by the water column." The wording makes it seem like the prey are colored red and are not normally present in the ocean (I think you may mean 'normally invisible'?). Also, does this sentence need to be linked to a citation or is it common knowledge within bioluminescence research?

The added content is concise and easy to read. There are some grammatical or spelling issues, for example: "light" is missing an l and "each other" is missing a space. The added content is well organized and fits the Illumination well.

Images and Media
None added.

Overall Impressions
The added content enhances the Illumination section of the article and makes the information more complete. There is room for some more detail to add clarity, especially the identified confusing sentence and the rhodopsin information (which you indicated that Karol was working on). Your additions to this article are positively improve the information regarding red light bioluminescence.

Nice job!