User:Andreaag0nzalez/Marxist feminism/Giselleam317 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Andreaagonzalez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Andreaag0nzalez/Marxist_feminism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The first sentence isn't clear about what Marxist feminism is, but instead says it's a variant of feminism. The first paragraph does give information about what the article is about and gives further information on the main topic. It is a bit over detailed, and these details can be used in the body paragraphs rather than a big paragraph as the lead.

Content

The content is relevant to the topic but the whole body paragraph in general contains too much information. Details like this can be sectioned so the article looks a bit more organized. As a reader I would have to read the whole paragraph to find the information I'm looking for, rather then if the information was sorted differently it would be easier. The content in general is up to date and does provide enough details about Marxist feminism.

Tone and Balance

The content does seem to be neutral. It gives information about the Marxist theory and how its related to many things such as capitalism. The details about materialist feminism are a bit too much, since it does take from the main topic.

Sources and References

The information covered in this article is well supported by sources and it does a great job in giving credit to the authors. Most of the facts are backed up by a citation. Some of the sources are just used for one fact and others were used and summarized to new words. All sources are credible since some are from famous studies, scholars, and known websites.

Organization

The whole article in general is a bit confusing since it is clammed up. It could've been broken down into more paragraphs to create a clear message. The main topic should be in the first paragraph and what the other paragraphs are going to be about as well. Anything else is too much information in the lead. There are rare to no grammar errors.

I think in general the article was improved and looks complete. The strengths in the article are the well stated facts about the main topic and details.

-Giselle Alcaraz 10/19/2022

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