User:Andreanicolecruz/The Giver/Neutralplaid Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Andreanicolecruz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * The Giver


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Giver

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft represents additions to the "Literary significance and criticism" section of the article. The primary draft is somewhat difficult to parse, with some grammatical issues relating to numbering, appostrophes, and tenses. The revisions are also a bit unwieldy but the original article says "they conducted a research", so it's an overall improvement. The tone of the new section came off as somewhat favorable towards the book/author, which is reasonable but strays from the Wikipedia neutrality guidelines. The bolding is also a little jarring but I assume that's just part of the editing process.