User:Andrew-Hartman-1/Federalist No. 6/Watermelemily Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) User:Andrew-Hartman-1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Andrew-Hartman-1/Federalist No. 6


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Andrew-Hartman-1/Federalist No. 6

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The first sentence needs to be shortened and made more to the point.

Make a brief description about what the article will be about in the first paragraph.

the article does give background but I think it could be expanded upon.

Good amount of detail but there could be more in the first two sentences of 'Hamilton's Arguments' section.

Everything added is relevant.

I would like to see counterarguments from more than one perspective.

Good work at keeping neutral, nothing else need be said.

Not enough sources, adding more to counter arguments will help.

I think there should be more sources that help with the analysis of Hamilton's argument as well. How do you know what you're saying (Shays Rebellion, commercial republics, John Dewitt).

Strong points: neutral tone, section points

Things to fix: sources, more perspectives