User:AndrewPpohl/3D printing/Mbraile Peer Review

General info
AndrewPpohl
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AndrewPpohl/3D_printing?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 3D printing

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Wikipedia article on 3D printing is ambitious because it is such a long article. It seems difficult to tackle, but having said that, I think you have done a great job listing out ways that you want to improve it. I also think that picking a bigger article was a smart decision because it give you lots of room to work and find issues within it.

Are you planning on making changes to the parts that you listed could use some help? Or are you only going to edit the parts that are listed under your "edit suggestions". I think that you should plan to edit all of these things, otherwise there will not be much change to the original article.

While I think that your edits under "edit suggestions" are great, I think that they could definitely use more resources. You currently only have one reference cited. I am assuming that you are still working on this and will have more in the future, but given that you are adding to the article, you should have more resources to back up your claims.

In addition, it seems that a lot of what you are planning on doing with the article is cutting it down to remove unnecessary information or decrease redundancy. While this definitely will help the readability of the article, I think that the main point of the assignment is to expand on information that the original article overlooks and to go deeper into the history of the technology. I would consider adding social barriers that you can come up with to 3D printing or overlooked contributors. This might help expand the article in a meaningful way without making it too difficult to read or too repetitive. You could also add in images to make the article more interesting to look at.

Overall, you have a good outline of what you want to accomplish for the article, but as for your actual edits, they may need to be a bit more fleshed out. There is not much here yet to review. Great work so far!