User:Andrew ferdetta/Science, technology, society and environment education/Nicole Willard-Moore Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Andrew ferdetta


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Andrew ferdetta/Science, technology, society and environment education


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Science, technology, society and environment education

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This article provides a solid overview of the importance of STSE education. Each source is distributed and utilized effectively, transitioning between points fairly with ease. From my review, I was impressed with the sound structure of this draft and I think the subject was phrased clearly by the lead. The introductory sentence was concise with the article's topic and is fairly sufficient with the information that follows. The content is relevant to the article and utilized well within the draft. The content also somewhat addresses an equity gap in how STSE education in developing countries is important, though the subject is discussed briefly. The content remains fairly neutral though leans slightly towards conviction as STSE education is labeled "important"; the content feels slightly persuasive, though not too heavily. The sources are fairly up-to-date, accurate, and provided by a diverse spectrum of authors, though there do not appear to be clickable links besides the first source. Regarding organization, the changes that I would suggest the author apply to the article are to reevaluate some structural inconsistencies, such as double-checking for grammatical inaccuracies and/or rephrasing some sentences by either combining them or using better transitions. These changes would be an improvement because they would increase the article's strength and coherency. Overall, the draft is contextually efficient with only minor yet possibly extensive editing required.