User:Andrewbn2003/Battle of Taliwa/Gissygis Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Andrewbn2003


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Andrewbn2003/Battle_of_Taliwa?action=edit&veswitched=1
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Battle of Taliwa

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

You do seem to include a lead but adding more information in general will be helpful to understanding this topic. The original article already seems to introduce the topic but more information and pictures will make it stronger. You do a good job of introducing the article's topic. Your article is very well organized into relevant chronological sections which makes it easy for the reader to follow along and understand. I appreciate that you added more subsections in comparison to the original. The information included also seems to be neutral and not biased towards a particular position. All the sources you added work and they also come from a diverse authors. The content was clear and easy to read. I like the Battle of Taliwa map image that was added, but it is a little blurry and difficult to see. I think that the content added has definitely improved the overall quality of the article as it is more developed and complete. I think that some of the sections such as "Resolution," "Battle," and "Aftermath" could be further explained and developed. They are pretty short and brief. Maybe you could add information of the opposing characteristics (this would be beneficial in the context portion of the article), aftermath effects on other levels such as social, cultural, political, etc., or more leading figures (if you could find them).