User:Andrewsaillant/Squat lobster/Nickgraz33 Peer Review

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Julie Vu


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 * Squat lobster

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I am not sure that this topic is relevant to the work you added in, but I do admire how you jumped right into the details of your "Development" section. You did not waste any time repeating an introduction as that was already completed above. Your work is very concise and detailed.

Content:

I think the content of the section you added is very relevant to the narrative of the page as a whole. While it is good to learn about specifics of the squat lobster, it is just as important to learn how they develop and nature their eggs. All of the information added in this section furthers my knowledge of the squat lobster and how they survive.

Tone and Balance:

Overall I think that all of the material you added was very neutral and not directed one way or the other. You did not give any opinion, instead you just explained details about fecundity and embryo development of the squat lobster. Everything appears to have been cited as well, further reinforcing that you did not input your own opinion on the work and instead just detailed the facts out for the readers.

Sources and References:

I admire how you did not rely on one specific source to give you all of the information your detailed in the "Development" section, instead you used three different ones. All three of the sources appear to be reliable from when I looked at them. I also think that by not only relying on one source you were able to confirm that the content you were added was accurate and relevant to the topic. I also liked how you linked other important wikipedia pages in your contribution so people who wanted to do extra research or were unsure of a topic could easily look into the material themselves.

Organization:

I think you organized the material you added in a very succinct and efficient way. "Development" can be a very big topic but I liked the way you explained a little about the eggs and incubation time before moving into specific details about the embryo and the stages of its development. You did not focus too much one detail or another, and instead gave a brief overview that explained all aspects of how the squat lobster develops. I did notice one small grammar mistake in the first sentence of the second paragraph under "Development" so maybe check that out, but other than that it looks good!!

Images and Media:

From what I can see I don't believe you added any images or pictures. The one that is in there right now appears to be relevant and helps enhance the topic of the page. I also did not see any copywrite issues with that particular picture.

Overall Impressions:

I really liked the content you added to the page. By adding a whole new header you were able to create a section that can truly enhance the learning of the person reading this wikipedia page. All of the information was concise and straight to the point, yet also in enough detail so that it was not overly confusing. You added three distinct citations that even further strengthens the material you added. All of the content seemed credible and the tone was neutral. The only other thing I would fix is the one confusing line that I pointed out above. Nice work overall, I really enjoyed reading this!!