User:Andyandgrogu/Texas Longhorn/MANAT33Gal Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Andyandgrogu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Andyandgrogu/Texas_Longhorn?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Texas Longhorn

Evaluate the drafted changes
Very well done article draft! You accomplished a lot of the initial goes you set out to do improving the structure of the article, adding in important information that was missing, and fixing some of the confusing content from the original article. I think you created a well-rounded article with a clear structure that was neutral, precise, and professional. I really admire they way that you reworked the information to make the article flow, reworking the original piece that was choppy and not cohesive, especially the addition of the biology section with subsections for the specific traits.

As for some small areas of improvement, I think the first thing would maybe be following through with the addition of information on the ecological importance of the longhorn. As you mentioned on the article analysis, I believe adding in some details on the environment, predator-prey relationships, and/or lifespan would be beneficial to creating a well rounded article.

Another thing to possibly think about adding is some information (if there is any) on the impact or significance of the longhorn for Native American/Indigenous people or African American communities in the area. There was a mention of simulated "Indian attacks" in the decline and revival section that could possibly be expanded on to include the ways the longhorn were utilized or connected to those groups of people. This might help add a perspective of a different, minority group that would usually go overlooked in an article like this again, just making it more well-rounded and reflective of the full history.

I also wanted to mention that there was a section in the original article on the use of longhorns which definitely seems out of place, but mentions the cultural significance and conservation views that could be worth further researching and including in the final draft.

Overall, great job. I think you have created an excellent article that has greatly improved the original piece. Your writing style, structure, and added information did a lot to benefit the article and with only a few small changes/additions I think you will have an amazing final product. I can't wait to how it goes!