User:Anespino/Arielle Twist/Rheasteruci Peer Review

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Grammar/flow peer review-I added "invisible comments" where there were some errors, I think you should be able to see them below. If not, the list below is an explanation of what I came across.


 * 1) Delete "located in Canada,"
 * 2) End run-on sentence in Sentence 3, add period and capitalize b in "began"
 * 3) Delete "has" in Sentence 7
 * 4) Add last name of agent Rachel
 * 5) Add that Cooke McDermid is an entertainment agency
 * 6) Add space after comma under heading "Writing"-Sentence 2
 * 7) Add direct source in Sentence 5

Everything else:

I like the beginning, the article gets right to the point of who Arielle Twist is, what her occupation is, and what her background is. There is plenty of great, relevant information that allows the readers to understand how Arielle's talent as an artist has allowed her to win several awards, and that is echoed in the very helpful "Awards and Nominations" section later. In the "Career" section, if possible, I think it would be beneficial to add how Arielle became an artist, if possible. The three subheadings, Writing, Visual Art, and Performance Art, all tie the article together very well. I like the use of the table for the Published Works and Exhibitions, it just needs a couple more dates. There are multiple Wikilinks embedded within the article, which is great for anyone who wants to do further research. The content is neutral and everything is relevant to the main topic. Finally, the number of references is good so far, I understand how hard it is to find sources on a topic that isn't very well-known.

Arielle Twist is a Nehiyaw (Cree) multidisciplinary artist and sex educator based in Halifax, Nova Scotialocated in Canada. She is originally from George Gordon First Nation in Saskatchewan and identifies as a Two-Spirit, transgender woman. She was mentored in her early career by writer Kai Cheng Thom and has since published a collection of poems in 2019 in her book Disintegrate / Dissociate ,began working as a sex educator at Venus Envy and become an MFA candidate at OCAD University Graduate Studies in the Interdisciplinary Art, Media and Design (IAMD) program. Twist has also expanded her artistry past poetry into visual and performance art. Over her time as an artist, Arielle Twist has had her work featured in Khyber Centre for the Arts, Toronto Media Arts Centre, La Centrale Galerie Powerhouse, Centre for Art Tapes, Art Gallery of Mississauga, Art Gallery of Nova Scotia, and Agnes Etherington Art Centre. Twist also won the Indigenous Voices Award for English poetry and the Dayne Ogilvie Prize for emerging LGBTQ writers in 2020.

Career
Arielle Twist met her mentor Kai Cheng Thom and book editor Billy-Ray Belcourt during her residency in Banff Centre. She also has an agent Rachelat Cooke McDermid

Writing
Arielle Twist began writing in 2017 after being encouraged by her mentor Kai Cheng Thom. Twist went on to publish "What It's Like to Be a Native Trans Woman on Thanksgiving" in Them on November 232017. Twist debuted as an author with a collection of thirty-eight poems in her book Disintegrate / Dissociate published on June 4, 2019 by Arsenal Pulp Press. The book focuses on "human relationships, death, and metamorphosis". Her poems, which have been described as raw, confrontational, and eloquentexamine themes of colonization, kinship, displacement, and transmisogyny. About her writing, Twist states that "It feels like the most vulnerable thing [she has] ever done". Twist says Disintegrate / Dissociate is about "love, loss, and grief" as well as her coping with her trauma through dissociation. The poem "Manifest" in the book was dedicated to editor Billy-Ray Belcourt who also held residency at the Banff Centre while Twist was there. In late 2019, Arielle also contributed to the Together Apart Series. Twist's book publication along with her collection of essays has earned Twist recognition and awards including the Dayne Ogilvie Prize for LGBTQ Emerging Writers from the Writers' Trust of Canada and the Indigenous Voices Award for English poetry in 2020.

Visual Art

 * Canadian Art

Performance Art

 * Good Robot Brewing Company
 * Shelf Life Books

Recognitions

 * 2019 - 19 Canadian Writers to Watch in 2019; CBC Books
 * 2019 - Featured Artist at Summer Indigenous Art Intensive; University of British Columbia
 * "Brother" Poem Feature Poetry in Voice
 * 20 New Books by or About Queer Women to Read This Spring