User:Anewens/Diffuse neonatal hemangiomatosis/Smguzman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like

Peer review prompts

Question 1. Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”? [explain]

The Lead was concise and informative; I appreciate the hyperlinks used for medical terminology. The majority content added is up to date. There are some older articles referenced, for example when talking about corticosteroid use the article referenced is from 1973. But you do address that the treatment with corticosteroids is historic and has fallen out of favor. The organization is clear and the tone of the article is neutral. The only draw back is that it the article has moments where lay language is not utilized. It may be difficult for people to understand without looking up terminology.

Question 2. Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement? [explain]

I also could not find their goals for improvement but the team added a substantial amount of information to the article, citing multiple case reports and studies. I see all the hard work they put into this article and I can only imagine that they met their goals.

Question 3: Person B answers: Are the claims included verifiable with cited secondary sources that are freely available? [explain]

There is a citation missing for after the first paragraph of the "Hepatic hemangiomas section". Otherwise everything is cited and sources where reputable. It seems like the primary literature was from case reports and small studies but that is understandable given the rarity of the disease.