User:Angb2015/Autism therapies/Nikkigb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Angb2015


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Angb2015/Autism_therapies?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Autism therapies

Lead

 * I think the lead should focus more on autism therapy rather than autism since the article focuses on autism therapy. In the lead you could summarize what therapy is used for autism such as Applied behavioral analysis, animal assisted therapy, etc.

Content

 * I think you definitely added some valuable information about ABA, occupational and speech therapy. However, I think it might be more beneficial to add more information about underrepresented topics in the article such as Neurofeedback or Pattering.

Tone and Balance

 * There is one sentence that comes off somewhat opinionated ,"There is no known cause or cure for Autism" . I would change this sentence because there are many different opinions on whether or not there is a cause or cure and we want to keep the tone as neutral as possible.

Sources and References

 * The spectrum news article is not really the most trustworthy source, but the references on the article seem to be more credible and relate to the article a lot so I would consider using those instead.
 * The other source only has one author so I would suggest finding one with multiple authors to help the credibility.
 * A lot of the content is missing citations in the text.

Organization

 * I think it might be helpful to split up the content you wrote by each topic it discusses that is in the article, and make it more clear.

Overall Impressions

 * I think you add some valuable information about the different types of autism therapies. My only suggestions would be to look for more credible sources, cite them, and split up the content by topic.

{Hi Nikki! Thank you for your critiques on my work! While I do agree with my article body may have been more opinionated than it should be, I do think that I have credible sources to back my claim which were suggested therapies. As far as my article lead, I chose to speak on Autism more than the actual therapies so that readers who are not familiar with Autism would have a background on what it is before describing and going in depth about Autism therapies. Hope this helps!}