User:AngelOffley/Mindfulness-based stress reduction/Sawyerbrady44 Peer Review

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AngelOffley
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:AngelOffley/Mindfulness-based stress reduction:Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Mindfulness-based stress reduction

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead still needs to be updated to reflect the new content to be added. The current lead is concise and leaves a lot of room for detailed improvement. I see that your initial content to be added changes the first sentence adding who the topic was created by. Details could be added having to do with the major sections of the article.

There is much more content that needs to be added that is relevant to the topic (MBSR). The content added in the sandbox is relevant to the topic but needs additional details. The content to be added is neutral and doesn't take on any biases.

The article does not seem to try to persuade the reader in any direction. There are no viewpoints that I see that are underrepresented or overrepresented. Some viewers may think that the authors are trying to push this type of meditation by saying that many young people are switching to this type.

The sources seem to be current and reflect what the literature is saying about the topic. I clicked on many of the links and they work. Some of the sources can be seen as outdated but current with present studies surrounding the topic. The talk page is just a big argument on why certain things should be added/taken out and is hard to sort through. The main issues that I see have to do with how accurate the science behind this type of meditation and how credible certain sources are.

There may be better sources that are more current and up-to-date. There are many secondary sources and a diverse group of authors that contributed to the article.

As far as organization, there are parts of the article that could be rearranged to help the flow of the article. The content added is relevant and easy to read. It may be a little concise given that many of us don't have much in our sandbox yet.

There is good use of pictures throughout the article that are well sourced and show the founder of this type of meditation, Jon Kabat-Zinn. Other media and pictures might make the article more visually appealing.

The content to be added is good and helps the articles opening sentence. More definitely needs to be added to give strength to this article.