User:Anishnaabslay/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Water protectors

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because we are talking more and more about indigenous activism surrounding the environment and when it comes to water Women are seen as central. It ties in quite nicely to class as it has to do with how Women are perceived in different cultures.

Lead section
The lead section is okay, it uses some outdated language like "Native" instead of indigenous and has some issues with sentence structure. The lead does provide a brief overview but the sentence structure makes it hard to understand because many of the sentences are wordy, it could be more concise.

Major things to work on:

 * Sentence structure
 * overall organization of information

Content
Overall the content is there, it is just organized in a way that could be more effective, for example there is no section about how women play a central role in the movement, it is mentioned but should probably have its own section. The content is up to date and does address historically underrepresented people (should have more about indigenous women). There are plenty of sources used, these sources are written from various perspectives and many of them are peer reviewed articles. When clicking on the links most if not all worked.

Major things to work on:

 * Categorize the information more effectively

Tone and Balance
The tone is neutral, and the article is unbiased overall. There are some issues with outdated terms, for example in some cases the author uses the term "native" instead of indigenous.

Major things to work on:

 * Make sure you use the terms which are generally preferred by the people you are writing about Ex: indigenous instead of native.

Sources and references
For the most part statements of fact are backed up by citation, only a couple are missing. The sources used are proper and up to date.

Major things to work on:

 * Make sure to cite each time you make a claim

Organization and writing quality
As previously stated the article is written in a complicated way, with sentences often having a weird or wordy structure. There are some grammatical errors, however, some may be due to differences in Canadian and American spelling. The article's main issue is the writing style, which is often choppy and hard to read.

Major things to work on:

 * Sentence structure
 * Wordiness
 * How information is categorized

Images and media
The Images used are pertinent to the subject at hand. They are very well chosen and represent different parts of the movement well. The images are well formatted and follow guidelines.

Talk page Discussion
The talk page discussion is very aggressive for no reason, as an indigenous person I can understand that it is an emotional topic but we have to keep in mind that first the original article was written as part of a school project and so the writers may not be familiar with everything. The page has issues but that can be explained in a kinder way. It does however explain why the sentence structure is confusing and also why some citations are missing.

Major things to work on:

 * Kindness

Overall impressions
The article uses good sources and contains all the relevant information, the issue is how the information is presented by the author. If the information was structured in a better way and the sentences written more simply then it would be a wonderful article.