User:Anishsun/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Winnette McIntosh Ambrose

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
Chose the article for class assignment, interested in chefs and cooking competition winners and their current role in society. Initial impressions of article were that it is quite succinct, with relevant details about the life of Winnette McIntosh Ambrose which are covered in a very brief manner. The article is neutral and presents the facts as they are. Sections could definitely be expanded with additional sources and details regarding early life and current success in the cooking and bakery industry in Washington DC.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section

The lead section of the article does include an introductory sentence that intros what the article is supposed to be about, however it feels a bit weak. While it does clearly describe the article's topic and detail the individual's personal accomplishments and their current role in society, the introductory sentence could be stronger. The lead could be improved as it does not include a synopsis of what sections the article is going to cover. The lead does include all the information that is later present in the article, which is successful. The lead for this article is quite concise and succinct and could use more introductory sentences leading in to the individual's current occupation.

Content

The content of the article is definitely related to the topic, however the article positions itself in the lead section to discuss both the engineering and baking side of the individual, yet it only details the baking side of the person which is an area that could be expanded upon. The content is up to date as the sources are as recent as they could be regarding the individuals' current accomplishments. In my opinion, the content missing that could be worked on is the individual's early life, engineering side, the story behind the origins of the bakery, the DC area and the cooking industry, and how she got on Cupcake Wars. The article as a whole provides insight into female business entrepreneurs and the underrepresented group of women in business.

Tone and Balance

The tone and balance of the article remain quite neutral as there is not much information presented that could be argued or isn't factual. There are no claims that are heavily biased to a particular position as the information in the article simply presents facts and no viewpoints from different sources and sides which would augment the article as a whole. The article could use differing viewpoints about the individual's career and business story. The article stands to have no ground to persuade its audience other than presenting the facts for the audience to accept and move on.

Sources and References

The sources and references are mostly backed up by a reliable secondary source of information how the sources used could be much more diversified as opposed to a couple news websites and the individual's university page. The sources are thorough for the information that is currently on the article, however it could definitely be expanded on to incorporate all the sections detailed -- namely the early life of the individual, story behind entrepreneurship, cooking industry, and Cupcake Wars. The sources are current and up to date and the links work.

Organization and Writing Quality

The organization and overall flow of the article is decent however it feels a bit choppy and out of order. The article is concise and clear however the sections could be rearranged to work in chronological order beginning with the individual's early life and later progressing to their education background, and later their career journey in the baking industry. The article does not have any grammatical or spelling mistakes. The personal life section is intertwined with the section about the individual's education which could lead the reader to feel that the article is choppy and hard to understand.

Images and Media

There are no images or media in the article, which would be very beneficial in augmenting and enhancing the understanding of the topic. There are images that are readily available on the internet including the individual's time at Cupcake Wars which could definitely be used in the article.

Talk Page Discussion

The talk page of the article details that "This article must adhere to the biographies of living persons (BLP) policy, even if it is not a biography, because it contains material about living persons." It also details that the sources on the individual should not be poorly sourced in order to preserve Wikipedia's Biography section. The article is not currently rated by Wikipedia.

Overall Impressions

Overall impressions of this article is that the status is complete, yet could definitely be improved and expanded upon in terms of content, media, sources, and including different viewpoints and perspectives into the individual's life.