User:Anna.gking/Xie Jin/Emmaw134340 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Anna.gking)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Anna.gking/Xie Jin


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Xie Jin

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The grammar and sentence structure needs editing to flow better. I would specify your title to "Portrayal of Chinese Women" because you're discussing the women in Two Stage Sisters. Try to keep your writing as neutral as possible, for example remove the "it should be noted that" you can just state your sentence. You repeat the title of your film in all caps near the end of the paragraph instead of using the wiki link, I'm not sure if that's supposed to be there. Overall, I think the content is interesting and adding Xie Jin's thoughts adds more depth and context to the film itself. Your references are good and the links work!