User:Anna204/Racism in Japan/Willa39 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Anna204


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Anna204/Racism_in_Japan?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Racism in Japan

Evaluate the drafted changes
When looking at racism in Japan, looking at differences in healthcare is a great way to go about it, especially when that has not already been addressed. The amount of references used to back up that information is strong as well. However, while the facts are strong, I believe it could be improved by a direct tie in between the difference in healthcare and racism. Looking at the section alone I was a bit lost as to the purpose at first, and I feel just a few sentences connecting the issues would greatly improve the ease of understanding in the reader. As a whole though the section is definitely good and the suggested improvements are only aimed at the flow of ideas.