User:AnnaAstrup/Shirley Wu/TheAlmightyLoaf1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:AnnaAstrup


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AnnaAstrup/Shirley_Wu?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AnnaAstrup/Shirley_Wu?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AnnaAstrup/Shirley_Wu?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think you did a really nice job for making your article on Shirley Wu. I looked through a few of your sources and they all seem like very concrete forms of information. My one pointer would be to re-work the name of your first heading which is titled Shirley Wu. As the article is called Shirley Wu I think it is somewhat redundant to name your first paragraph that. I also would include maybe a little more in the initial blurb saying her current role and who she works for. Yes, it's short and sweet, and sometimes that is the best thing to say, however I think a little more could be added without taking too much away from the article.