User:AnnaRO2021/Isabelle Ferreras/HirokiOsada Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AnnaRO2021


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Isabelle Ferreras


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Anna! I enjoyed reading this new article you created. Following is the brief comment:)

First, I think choosing Isabelle Ferreras is a great choice given that she seems to be notable enough and deserves an individual article. The lead summarizes who she is quite succinctly. My suggestion would be adding sentences as to why she is considered to be important figure, and what achievement she is best known for. I think such sentences will give readers better sense about who she is and why she deserves attention. With regard to the content, I like how you organize her main thoughts/ideas in the section of work. Yet at least for me, it felt a bit difficult to understand her thougth from the information given in this article. Perhaps some more suppremental information could be added to help reader understand what she actually meant by saying, for instance, "firms are the institution in democratic societies that best embody the tension of between capitalism and democracy." I found that tone and balance of the article is neutral and impratial. I think your writing is perfect in this sense. Overall, I would be excited to read more about Isabelle Ferreras' thought and life. Only the gist of them are presented in this article, and readers may potentially be interested to know more than what this article tells them, such as where she is from, in what school of thougth she can be categorised, etc. Yet I understand the diffictulty given that this is a new article, and I think you are doing a great job at starting and further editing this!

Hiroki