User:AnnaRO2021/Isabelle Ferreras/Vixwint Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AnnaRO2021


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Isabelle Ferreras


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Isabelle Ferreras

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Anna!

I am really glad you were able to create a Wikipedia page for Isabelle Ferreras, judging from the work she's done she was long overdue for one!

I think you were able to include a good amount of information on her, keep a neutral tone, and include good take away from her work.

In terms of improving the lead, it might be helpful to include in the first line was her focus of study is. Something like "Isabelle Ferreras is a sociologist and political scientist that focuses on...." I've also seen often when mentioning peoples background that for academics, the author might include either their senior thesis topic for the person's undergraduate degree, or what their focus was in graduate school. If it is possible to find that information I think that would also make nice additions.

For the Work section I think you do well in summarizing and condensing her research. My suggestion would just be to add hyperlinks to some terms for people to do additional reading or gain a better understanding? For example, you could hyperlink firm and link it to the appropriate Wikipedia page or the term bicameral to bicameralism. It also may be helpful to give brief summaries, maybe a quote of what would be on the book jacket of her books, to give even more information about them to the reader?

Finally, I would just suggest adding a profile picture!

Other than that I think you've done a wonderful job so far and I am looking forward to seeing the final piece!

Best,

Victoria Winter