User:Annacaroline01/Ashley M. Jones/Maddie beckley Peer Review

General info
(Annacaroline01)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Ashley_M._Jones&diff=1187681768&oldid=1187380333
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
-I think you kept the lead the same, but I agree with that becuase the lead is really strong.

-The first major change seems to be you got rid of the original page's early childhood life and rewrote a much more detailed one. The early life section goes through different stages in her early life that were influiential for her current writing career. You did a very nice job with this and I dont have any critques.

-The education section of you page looks like you kept pretty much the same but just reworded to make it flow easier. Even though you reworded you still kept a neutral tone and your rewording made it much easier to read.

-I like that you added to the career section to showlight how much work she has done over her lifespan becuase the original page had very few things. I think this was a smart addition and is still simple without being over detailed.

-Adding a section for her actvisim was such a smart idea becuase this adds layers for not only who she is as person but her other purposes besides a career for writing.

-Also adding the the poetic style and influences section was a great idea.

-All the sources check out

-The ideas I have for more things to add would be adding a section dedicated just to things shes written. Just a compiled list of all the work shes edited or written.