User:Annacaroline01/Ashley M. Jones/Marianna.willobe Peer Review

General info
Annacaroline01
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Ashley M. Jones - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Ashley M. Jones - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * I was a little unclear about whether or not the activism piece was intended to be the lead for the article (but that's just because I'm not entirely used to Wiki's formatting yet).
 * Under the Poetic Style and Influences segment, I believe the first sentence is succinct and encapsulates the author's intentions nicely.
 * I think some of the sentences could be more condensed, for example, "Her poetry covers different subject matters ranging from celebrations of love and family to more deep works exploring the atrocities that Black men and women face in America." I think this could be broken up into two sentences, just to make it read a little smoother.  This is not a critique of the information provided itself, just an idea on how to maybe present it differently.
 * I think you weaved the quotes in very nicely, it gives the write-up a more personal touch of the author herself.
 * The content you provided was relevant to the topic and offered a deeper insight into Ashley M. Jones as not only a writer but also an activist.
 * There were no biased sources/ the information was not presented biasedly. The tone of the article reads neutrally.
 * I believe the content and sources you provided give the article substantially more insight into the life of the author by incorporating quotes, including her sources of inspiration, and shedding light on her identity.