User:Annaleah7/Family Matters (organization)/Amorriss Peer Review

General info
(provide username) My group is providing a peer review for family matters and it's for Annaleah7
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Annaleah7/Family Matters (organization)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added on this Wikipedia page by my peers who are a part of the Family Matters volunteer group. The lead includes an introductory sentence that is concise and clear for framing the rest of the article and explaining the main concepts and ideas related to the service group Family Matters. The description is brief yet includes solid information to show what you should know before diving into the rest of the page. The lead is good to start and is a proper length, especially for a draft, it would be important to check back once more sections are established for the article in the final.

Content: So far in the first draft of the Family Matters Wikipedia article they only have one solid section with a lot of interesting and relevant data. The only thing is, while the content is relevant to the organization of Family Matters, it could be helpful as a reader and for the presentation of the agenda of the page, splitting up the content and making smaller sections with different titles. I think that because of the format, there is missing content to support the history and services.. Etc. The information presented so far is pretty up to date as they reference 2020. The content however could cover more area and present more information on underrepresented populations.

Tone and balance: the content included for the family matters page is very neutral and describes their work from a well rounded perspective. I can’t identify any biases in their content and I think they do a  good job of describing the work family matters does without taking any particular side. I don’t think they are swaying us either way in terms of which position to take, because the content included is neutral and objectively describes the work family matters is doing. In particular, the lead section has a very neutral tone and simply describes some of the work family matters does and what they value and emphasize. It is clear that the content is written to give readers an understanding of what family matters does, not how to feel about them or what opinion to have on them.

Sources and references: in terms of sources, right now I only see two used throughout the draft. While they are current, one coming from 2022 and the other from 2024, I think there could definitely be more incorporated into the final wiki page, but it’s a good start for the first draft. Both sources come from the Illinois Green Alliance. While I do think they are solid sources and have been included into the wiki raft in beneficial ways, I definitely think it will be helpful to include a variety of sources from other places. That way a more well rounded background can be given. It’s clear to me that the content accurately reflects the sources and I think they have done a great job summarizing and properly citing information, the only thing I would change is really just adding different sources to enhance the draft and bring in different authors and perspectives.

Organization: From what we can see, the Family Matters Wikipedia page is still a work in progress. There are only two sections: “Family Matters Chicago” and “Partnerships? or Sustainability”. There are elements of these sections that might need to be split up into separate sections for a clearer read. For example, in the first section, there is a mention of where the organization is located. This along with other appropriate background information could be added to a History section for instance. The space between the current two sections might be better filled with more sections so that everything has a place! With added informational sections, the page might seem more fluid and organized!

Overall impressions: After reading through Family Matters’ current Wikipedia draft, it is clear that they are definitely still working on incorporating different elements into the page! We would say that they need more of a formal lead and history, services, programs etc. sections. Additions like these would allow for the page to have more substance and depth.The group also needs a references page and incorporation of information from those references within the article. This will help to showcase where they are getting their information from and add an extra element of formality! Yet, because this was only a draft, it is clear that this group is going to have a great page by the end of this!