User:Annaleah7/Family Matters (organization)/Gmbretsch Peer Review

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annaleah7
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Lead
Your lead is very easy to follow and appears up to date! My only suggestion would be to make it more apparent what Family Matters does. Maybe get a little more specific into the programs that they offer. Even if you just say something like "tutoring services". I think it is great how concise and to the point it is, I would just add in some more clarifying terms so the reader understands what the organization does right off the bat. Additionally, there are a few spacing and grammar issues but those can be very easily fixed. I would also include more information about the founder and what year it was founded.

Content
I think you all did a great job on including recent content. I know it can be difficult to find information regarding these organizations, but I would focus more on the actual organization itself rather than solely their partnerships. I think including these partnerships is great to have in your article, but added with more information about Family Matters would make it even better. Additionally, I would reword the first section of your content body. By starting out with Illinois Green Alliance, it makes it seem like you are jumping to another organization. Instead you could maybe say "Since partnering with Illinois Green Alliance, an organization rooted in promoting sustainability practices in Illinois..."

Tone and Balance
I think you all do a good job about trying to remain neutral, but I would move away a tiny bit from trying to make Family Matters seem like a great organization. It sounds like a wonderful place, but the purpose of this article is more to inform rather than convince the reader of how great it is. I would focus more on stating facts rather than using positive language. Instead of saying "positively impacting the community around them", maybe instead replace this with a statistic of how many people they have served, or highlight an event they have held in the past.

Sources and References
After checking your sources, they seem to be very reliable! Your citations are done perfectly as well! If possible, I would add more sources related to Family Matters. Without including any sources directly discussing Family Matters, it comes across as less reliable. I know how hard it can be to find sources. We were able to find some through the Loyola Library database. I think it would be perfect to keep the sources that you already have, I would just incorporate more news articles about Family Matters or any other sources that talks about Family Matters directly.

Organization
Overall, your article is very easy to read and follow! I love how you keep the sections concise and to the point. I know this is still in the very early stages, but as you move forward I would add some more sections to your article. Maybe include one on history, community impact, or even split up the partnerships and sustainability category into two separate categories. There are a few grammatical errors here and there but those can be easily fixed. My only suggestion would be to go back in an edit some of the word choices in the first part to make it clearer. Great job!

Overall Impressions
Overall, I think you guys are in a great place! My main suggestions would be to add more sources relating to Family Matters, include more sections, add more information relating to Family Matters, and spend less of your article body discussing partnerships. I think partnerships and sustainability are important to include, but the article should be more focused on the organization itself. Additionally, I would go back and edit your diction to sound less favorable towards Family Matters. That way, your article appears less bias and presents more like an impartial article. Great job! Looking forward to seeing your final article.