User:Annatardecilla/Health education/Along 2023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Annatardecilla


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Annatardecilla/Health_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Health education

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think that your group chose a great topic for this project. The lead all sounds great as well as the tone. Eveythig seems to flow very smoothly. I would check on the article that was published in 2009; Goto, Keiko; Murayama, Nobuko; Honda, Sayaka (2009), and make sure that that information is still the same, or if Japanese culture of sustainability has changed. I do agree that there needs to be more information in the role of the Heath Education Specialist. I do also think that you should add some a specific section to the School Health Education Worldwide but just focus on the U.S. Otherwise I don't think anything else needs to be changed or added. Just make sure that all of the sources are valid and make sure that the information that is already put in is correct.