User:Annawood2/Limestone/LoveTheExperience Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Annawood2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Annawood2/Limestone


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Limestone

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Lead is unaltered but is already a clear concise overview of the topic.

Content
The content that is being added is comprised of two sections. First there are a few small additions to the uses section. And second there is he additions of a new section about the scarcity of the raw material itself (Limestone). The last sentence in the first paragraph for scarcity is a bit vague. “These two dominant factors lead to the adaptation and selection of other materials that were created and formed to design alternatives for limestone that suited economic demands”. What are the other materials that were created?

-Structure and Organization
The additions to the uses section include good additions. I am a bit unclear as to where they are going to be fit in, but the first sentence would be a good opener for the section.

For the scarcity section, originally I assumed that it could fit in as a sub topic under occurrence but since the new information is primarily related to construction I believe that it would fit in better as a sub topic for uses. The Scarcity section itself is a good addition to the article. The flow of the third sentence could be adjusted. “Companies never had a shortage of limestone, however it was a fear among many”.

-Talk Page
There is nothing mentioned on the talk page, but something that could be discussed is where the section of Scarcity could be added.

-Clarity
The additions to this article are clear and well cited. The additions to the uses section are concise and will add to the ease to understanding of the raw material.

The additions of the scarcity section are slightly repetitive but important information. The section reads well but there are a couple of loose ends that could have additional information or a link to other articles to limit being vague. For example, the second last sentence “Limestone was classified as a critical raw material however, with the potential risk of shortages, it aided in the production of new technological systems and material industries” could include links to the new technological systems and material industrial mentioned.

-Balanced Coverage
The additions to the uses section are well balanced adding to several bits of unrelated information the exciting section that benefit the overall delivery of the information. The Scarcity section seems to be comprised from primarily one source slightly offsetting the overall balance of the section. Here is another source on the topic to help broaden the coverage of the section.

Ole Sparenberg & Matthias Heymann (2020) Introduction: resource challenges and constructions of scarcity in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries, European Review of History: Revue européenne d'histoire, 27:3, 243-252, DOI: 10.1080/13507486.2020.1737653

-Neutrality
The articles additions generally maintain a neutral tone throughout. Each additional piece of information is cited and therefore not presented as opinion.

However there is one sentence that slightly sways the nutrality, a source could be added to the third sentence in the scarcity section “Companies never had a shortage of limestone, however it was a fear among many” to correct this.

Sources and References
All sources were to live links/up to date and of relevant information to the additions made. There could be an additional source found for balancing the coverage of the new scarcity section. One new possible reference to do this is below.

Ole Sparenberg & Matthias Heymann (2020) Introduction: resource challenges and constructions of scarcity in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries, European Review of History: Revue européenne d'histoire, 27:3, 243-252, DOI: 10.1080/13507486.2020.1737653

Overall Impression and Suggestions for Improvement
The additions to the limestone page add new information that is beneficial to the flow and overall coverage.

Suggested improvements are

-changing the sentence structure of the third sentence in the scarcity section and adding a citation.

-adding an additional citation to the scarcity section (see suggested citation)

-edit of some vague sentences to include information on material that is referred to (see clarity sub section)