User:Anniep256/WALL-E/Brandon Shortrede Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)

Mason and Annie

Mglamb

Anniep256


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mglamb/sandbox?


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * WALL-E

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think that the first paragraph is not completely relevant to the topic we are discussing in class, as it talks mainly about the voice actors and the movie producers, and not the environmental topics. Furthermore, this information is already present in the original article of WALL-E.

The second paragraph is far better, I think it is a good start, but you should go deep into each of the topics you describe ("...health and nutrition struggles, human pollution, trash and recycling oversight, and risk of global devastation.".) for the next steps of this assignment.

I think the article was well written, except for the part you say "It was a movie about a robot on Earth which is now incapable of holding human life.". This sentence is confusing for me, as it feels like the robot is the one who is no longer capable of holding human life, rather than the Earth.