User:AnonStu10/Kobe Mosque/Gabbyveauthier Peer Review

General info
AnonStu10
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AnonStu10/Kobe_Mosque?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kobe Mosque

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead section is very straightforward. It delves into the topic of the article immediately, and includes a lead sentence that explains the topic of the article itself, which is key. It showcases a brief description of topics that are talked about later in the article, which shows great structure. The Lead section is a perfect length, not too short and not overly detailed. It gives a sense of what to expect when continuing on with the article. If there are any changes I would make, I'd say not to add words like "remarkably" because that strays away from the neutral stance. At the same time, I don't think its a huge deal, I see it as a "despite all odds" keyword.

All reference links work and are good sources. The article itself is structured very well. If there is any more information about the history of the Kobe Mosque, I would add more to it because it's a very important topic to touch on. Everything in the history section is great and very easy to understand.

Adding introduction sentences--or filler sentences--would take this article to the next step. Some parts in the architecture section don't flow as well as other parts do. The community impact section is great! It really provides insight about the Kobe Mosque that I, myself, wouldn't have expected to know.

Overall, this article shows great promise. It has been executed in the best way, there aren't many critiques I can find which says a lot about the work that was done.