User:Anonymous microbe/Bacillus cereus/Chinedu23 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Anonymous microbe, Is73500, Danimahoney, Jmoyang58


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Bacillus cereus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bacillus cereus

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far the work you all have done looks good. I really like the descriptions you all gave for your collected sources throughout your biography. They brief, yet very descriptive. I also think this is a very interesting microbe that you all have chosen. I do have some recommendations for the wiki article. Within the first paragraph, where the description of B. cereus is being given, there is a sentence towards the ending of the paragraph that seems redundant. The sentence I am referring to is "B. cereus bacteria are facultative anaerobes, and like other members of the genus Bacillus, can produce protective endospores." Since B. cereus bacteria is already stated to be a facultative anaerobe and endospore producing bacteria within the first sentence of the paragraph, having this sentence here seems a little redundant mainly because it is not offering any further information on this description. I would advise to either remove the sentence completely to avoid repetitiveness or provide more background information on theses processes, such as what the type of bodily components that facilitate these described functions. In addition, in the Ecology section within this article where it states B. cereus is not usually killed by alcohol, I would try to add the conditions that B. cereus is prone to death briefly right after. This could help provide flow within the paper and provide readers with a brief introduction for this topic as it is described in more detail later on it the article.