User:Anonymous microbe/Bacillus cereus/Eecc27 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Anonymous microbe, Danimahoney, Is73500, Jmoyang58


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Anonymous%20microbe/Bacillus_cereus?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bacillus cereus
 * Bacillus cereus

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead does a great job of explaining the microbe right off the bat with the scientific classifications that are link to their own pages. It also offers a nice overview of the bacteria that gives the reader a quick rundown. I did get a little confused when it started taking talking about the closely related species, but a quick recover and clean up should fix it up, so it flows better. The Ecology section also offered a great deal of information, but it could be presented in a clearer manner. The paragraph reads as it was piece mailed from several different sources with no transition from one idea to the next. It has great framework, but needs to be beefed up to aid in the readability. For the last section on the sand box, Pathogenesis, it offers good and unbiased information, but like other sections needs assistance in flow. I appreciate the plethora of sources that all look to be from reliable sources. Also, looking over the article, the page would benefit from some images to break up the text. Overall, I greatly enjoyed reading what you have added to this article. Now that the foundation has been set, more focus can be put on readability.