User:Anonymousardvark/Social media and identity/Tikey105! Peer Review

General info
Anonymousardvark, Icarlee3338, Adam12202
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Anonymousardvark/Social media and identity
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social media and identity

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft is off to a great start! I think there is a lot of good content in there, especially in the media literacy section. I liked how the tone of the added writing fits so well with what has already been published. In the influence on body image section, I think that they could also mention tiktok because that is a very current, recent and large contributor to this issue and I noticed they only really mentioned facebook and instagram. Within that section, I also think that they can update the layout because this section is the longest one and so it looks kind of intimidating so it would be easier to read if it was broken up into sections and maybe a couple photos or graphs would help as well.

The overall tone and presentation was very unbiased and fact-based, and I checked some of the links and references and they all checked out, were recent and updated. I didn't find any grammar errors nor run-on sentences.