User:AnthonyG5480/Millet (Ottoman Empire)

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In 1839 and 1856 multiple reforms were attempted with the goal of creating equality between the religious communities of the Ottoman Empire. In wake of these reforms multiple different new millets emerged, notably for multiple Eastern Catholic and Protestant Christian communities. Millets were also now to have there internal rule reviewed by the central government and clerics within the millet in order to keep their power in check. Many clerics of the millet system pushed back against these reforms as they believed it was meant to weaken millets and the specialized power they had built for themselves. These millets, refusing to withdraw there autonomy slowed down the attempted reforms and the general impact they were attempting to make on the equality of religious communities.

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You additions to the article look strong overall, and think that they will be a good source of added information to the page. That said, a couple of notes and things to add that I noticed are, first, I think there is an extra space in the second sentence between the words "for" and "multiple" which is probably just a typo. Also I am not certain but I believe you left out the word the in the second sentence, changing it to "in the wake of". Also consider adding a verb after the statement "multiple different new millets", as it stands it's not a complete sentence. Also in the fourth sentence, I believe you mean say to weaken rather then "weakens". One question I had was where you were going to place what you wrote in relation to what is already on the page? Honestly, I think that you could just replace what is there with your writing, rather then supplementing it. Other then those easy fix issues, I think you have a strong paragraph written that will help fill out an underdeveloped section of your article with good material from reputable citations. Good work. Also, sorry that I had to edit the sandbox so much, I was having trouble getting the template to work correctly.