User:Anthropologygirl/Double V campaign/Augusthistory Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Anthropologygirl


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Anthropologygirl/Double_V_campaign?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Double V campaign

Evaluate the drafted changes
INTRODUCTION:

The original article didn't specifically have an introduction section, so good that one was added. The original beginning paragraph was too long, and what Double V actually is got lost in the other information - changing that to become shorter, and more straight to the description was smart. The new introduction is to the point, included original information that gave a good description, and not overly detailed. The introduction, though, does not include the topics that are talked about throughout the rest of the article.

RESPONSE TO AFRICAN AMERICAN INVOLVEMENT IN WWII:

Although a good section, not a bunch of new information was added. But, the new information that was added, gave a different perspective about the topic. I like that that was split up and able to be more clear.

ROLE OF THE PRESS:

Maybe keep more of the information from the original Wikipedia article. It was good to added in the information about The Courier since that wasn't as in depth explained in the original.

RESULTS OF THE CAMPAIGN:

Compared to the original article, this section had added information that was important. I like that the original information was split up into the different headings, therefore allowing for more information that wasn't present before and help focus on all the successes Double V had.